Frisk,
I'd love your criticism! I've made a new account, though, and I'm moving my games to a new patreon, so make sure to check it out.
www.patreon.com/waferborn
I'm not checking the VictorMammoth account after this, but I am using WaferBorn to continue to write text adventures. Send my other account, WaferBorn, a message -- would love to chat!
-Victor