Your Only Young Twice Feedback and review

[shadowsong2b]

So far most of the feedback I've got has been good. but I figured this would be an easier way to receive feedback.

Part 1: https://animeotk.com/forum/downloads...o=file&id=3886

Part 2: https://animeotk.com/forum/downloads...o=file&id=3887

Part 3: https://animeotk.com/forum/downloads...o=file&id=3893

Part 4: https://animeotk.com/forum/downloads...o=file&id=3899

Part 5: https://animeotk.com/forum/downloads...o=file&id=3926

Part 6: https://animeotk.com/forum/downloads...o=file&id=3943

Part 7: In Progress. (No ETA at this time)

If you get an error message trying to download, the file probably hasn't been approved by AOTK staff yet, give it a bit and check again.

Thanks for reading everyone.

[ich_15]

Loved the first two parts, but I can't download the third one for some reason. It says I don't have permission.

[shadowsong2b]

yeah it's probably still processing. give it a little bit and it should be open.

[Akuma]

Just read part 1. Interesting story so far. I look forward to reading more. Your character development is very good.

Just a suggestion, but you may want to run your stories through word processors or an AI just to help with grammar. You can ask an AI just to spot mistakes but not try to change anything. These types of mistakes just kind of throw me out of a story when I see them.

[shadowsong2b]

I'll remember that. I got like two guys who I've been having proof reading this. But I'll remember to do this. Thanks. if you got a program you recommend please shoot it at me.