[ THE SWAP ] my first game

[VikingSpanko]

Originally Posted by aka

Haven't played the full game, but here are some thoughts on what I have played:

The writing is very clean and well done. *Especially* impressive when you say English is our fourth language! It reads like a native wrote it.

However, I wasn't a big fan of the heavy reliance on sound effects. Personally, I'd much rather see detailed descriptions of the spankings than a sequence of sound effects. I also didn't like the timed sound effect thing. I understand you were trying to create a sense of atmosphere and dread, but it just slowed me down, and that makes me cranky.

Between the heavy reliance on sound effects and the timing, the spankings themselves felt tedious to me, which is a major reason I stopped playing. That doesn't mean they're bad or anything. Based on previous comments there are clearly people for whom this kind of thing *does* work. But it's not my cup of tea.


The situation are *very* well set up and the puzzles are well done. I never had any question about where I should go next and the hints when you couldn't advance melded well with the overall atmosphere of the game. A difficult thing to pull off and very well done.

I would *strongly* encourage you, if you change nothing else, to go in and replace *tween* with something like *young woman* in the sunbathing scene. It sounds like you intended them to be in your twenties, but as it is the game basically implies your character is like nine, or at best early teens when you factor in other comments on your "teen bottom." Either way, that's a *complete* turn off for me, and I'm sure some other people on this site. So if that's not what you intended, I'd strongly encourage you to fix it. The rest of the game (that I've played) is vague enough that I could very easily imagine the character as an 18 year old senior.

So overall, it's a very well done game. Not a huge fan of the way the spanking scenes are done, but that just comes down to a difference in taste. You've demonstrated some talent and I hope you create more.

Thank you, aka! You're absolutely right about "tween" and the game has been
changed to reflect that they're women in their early twenties. That's what I thought
"tween" meant! Sorry about that! No children allowed!

The game was purposefully made in this particular way, so that it's not to someone's
taste is to be expected. I've learned though that they are too slow, so whatever I
create next will at least be quicker. Maybe I'll even just add the spanking sound on
repeat in the background while you're reading about it. Don't know yet. Thank you
for taking the time to critique my work.

PS: Let me just add that the first time I played Scarlett Moon I didn't get it at all!
Now it's one of my favourite games and I love it! Always looking forward to the next
chapter!

[Xio]

I love the game so far - my favorite text game to date - I’ve gotten the spankings from the Aunt neighbor Rachel the police Amanda’s visitor and many more from Amanda, but I cannot get past the point after I swap essays. Whether I pick the lock or just ring the doorbell and take the slipper spanking I get stuck in the closet with the unlocked phone from the living room and I have no idea what to do next and haven’t been able to get to day 2 yet. Am I missing something obvious?

[VikingSpanko]

Originally Posted by Xio

I love the game so far - my favorite text game to date - I’ve gotten the spankings from the Aunt neighbor Rachel the police Amanda’s visitor and many more from Amanda, but I cannot get past the point after I swap essays. Whether I pick the lock or just ring the doorbell and take the slipper spanking I get stuck in the closet with the unlocked phone from the living room and I have no idea what to do next and haven’t been able to get to day 2 yet. Am I missing something obvious?

I think the solution was to use phone you found in the room to
call the one in the living room, drawing her away from the study.

[dragoonleon]

I've made it up to the point of completing the swap and escaping the house but the second I try to go to my bike I get the cop ending. I'm assuming that ending happens after a certain number of clicks regardless of your actions but honestly don't know what I could do differently.

[VikingSpanko]

Originally Posted by dragoonleon

I've made it up to the point of completing the swap and escaping the house but the second I try to go to my bike I get the cop ending. I'm assuming that ending happens after a certain number of clicks regardless of your actions but honestly don't know what I could do differently.

You're right, almost.

I think there was a counter for every time you cross the street/
stand opposite her house. You have some leeway to make it, it
doesn't have to be anything like a perfect run.

From memory you have to stand there 10 times, I think it
activates at 15.

That said, I learned A LOT from making this game. My next game
is more customisable to your preferences and you can't achieve a
"game over" state.

[Wildfire]

Noticed a few places where im being called a boy as a girl.
all scenes with the red and blue, and half the scene with the aunt.

Also while i like the game, i would prefer if you where able to avoid getting spanked at all, and be able to save, find it really boring having to sit though the neighbour scene every time i make a mistake

And more pictures are always nice :P but i get how that's not always an option

[VikingSpanko]

Originally Posted by Wildfire

Noticed a few places where im being called a boy as a girl.
all scenes with the red and blue, and half the scene with the aunt.

Also while i like the game, i would prefer if you where able to avoid getting spanked at all, and be able to save, find it really boring having to sit though the neighbour scene every time i make a mistake

And more pictures are always nice :P but i get how that's not always an option

Thank you! The gender pronouns have all been corrected.
The game is too short IMO to justify a save system, and I
anticipate this is the last, final version of the game.

[Super Kami Guru]

So I seem to be stuck with the game, but that may just be me since it seems no one else is having any problems. I can't even figure out how to get into the house.

But I do wanna ask: is there any way of us spanking someone else? Pretty much everyone we encounter is mentioned to have a sexy or appealing bottom, and I would love to spank them back. Even if they are my teacher or aunt. Especially if it were either of them.

[milf]

Anyone else having issues with v 1.11 not being able to open it?

[Xio]

Originally Posted by milf

Anyone else having issues with v 1.11 not being able to open it?

The only way I could open it was in Firefox