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That biting of the sleeve is just too cute. Excuse me while I get my insulin. Now, to work...
Panel 1:
I felt my ass already swelling. In some places, it has hardened.
(Swelling is a process. If you use "have+verb" plus the past participle, you would indicate that the process has already finished, which is not the case here. Also, "to become hard" is not gramatically incorrect, but it´s considered poor stylistically to use become+a state when there is a specific verb to name that state, in this case, "to harden")
The dialogue is fine.
Panel 2:
Nothing to correct. I´m saying this words way more often now. Good job!
Panel 3:
Oh!! I should have prevented this prank... Weepweep...
(The prank she was intended to prevent has already happened, so you need to talk about in in the past)
